I am a Year 6 student at Edmund Hillary School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Room 9 and my teacher is Roya. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first draft. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Ka mau te wehi, awesome work Luisapeta! This is beautiful writing and I love how you have written in present tense as if it is happening right now. You have chosen describing words and a simile that help to develop your mood and the complexity of your main idea. One suggestion I would make for next time would be to make your text easier to read :)
Please structure your comments as follows: Positive - Something done well Thoughtful - A sentence to let us know you actually read/watched or listened to what they had to say Helpful - Give some ideas for next time or ask a question you want to know more about
Ka mau te wehi, awesome work Luisapeta! This is beautiful writing and I love how you have written in present tense as if it is happening right now. You have chosen describing words and a simile that help to develop your mood and the complexity of your main idea. One suggestion I would make for next time would be to make your text easier to read :)
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